I feel like, at the moment, it doesn't feel immediately apparent that we're witnessing the boys' imaginations as opposed to something that exists in their world, and I'm not sure whether this is something that helps or hinders the animation - what do you think?

Alex suggested that I could include some dialogue at the beginning of the animation in which the younger brother says that he wants to play a game, which can then lead into the current script. Do you think this would be an improvement? Or is there anything else you suggest?

This is what each scene is representing:

This is what each scene is representing:

Scene 1 - Moana

Scene 1 demonstrates the expectation to have children, with the act of sailing away being representative of a woman's freedom of choice.

Scene 2 - Katniss

This scene is used to show how women can often be expected to become housewives, with their homes almost acting as a prison - or a dome.

The frantic attempts at escape in the beginning demonstrate how some women can almost be subdued into becoming what is expected of them.

Scene 3 - Mulan

This scene portrays the expectation women face to get married and how they are essentially handed from one man (their father) to the control of another (their husband).

The transformation into Mulan represents how women are capable of leading men.

Scene 4 - Furiosa

This scene portrays how men can objectify women, while the endless desert is representing the way this objectification can cause a feeling of isolation or separation.

I still need to edit Scene 5 which I will link to the expectation of child birth that women often face - with the Alien queen acting as a physical representation of this expectation as its entire role is essentially to lay eggs.

I still need to remove the Trinity scene and replace it with another hero - I'm currently thinking of going with Moana as she is representative of female freedom and her character would fit well into the first scene as this is when the protagonist first leaves her old life in search for something else.

This new script is a bit of a departure from my original idea and is incorporating a lot more of Phil's feedback in regards to making the animation more in the vein of 'Duck Amuck' which has been a big influence. With these changes, the animation will be more entertaining and significantly less preachy/intrusive, instead allowing the same message to be told while remaining light and fun.

This animation will demonstrate the strength of women both inside and out of Hollywood, with the Protagonist representing women versus the Voice-Over acting as the controlling rulers of cinema who, even still, make choices with female characters to appeal to the male gaze.

All of the concept art that I've created so far can be transferred directly into the new story as the art style will remain the same, except I will now be designing costumes for the characters to make them more recognisable as existing movie characters.

I feel that the Mulan scene could be reworked to flow better as it currently doesn't feel as impactful as the others. I also think the V/O's dialogue will need some editing here and there to make it feel less static and forced, perhaps even removing it entirely.

From here, I will start designing costumes for the characters and new environments, as well as finalising existing concepts. I will then work on a storyboard, incorporating all feedback on this script, and get in contact with voice actors.

I would appreciate any and all feedback.

Duck Amuck

6 Duck Amuck from JID on Vimeo.

The Matrix - Lobby Scene

Kill Bill - Vernita Fight Scene

Mad Max: Fury Road - Immortan Joe's Death

Aliens - Alien Queen's Death