@Phil - Major | The Woods - Script v1
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I feel like, at the moment, it doesn't feel immediately apparent that we're witnessing the boys' imaginations as opposed to something that exists in their world, and I'm not sure whether this is something that helps or hinders the animation - what do you think?
Alex suggested that I could include some dialogue at the beginning of the animation in which the younger brother says that he wants to play a game, which can then lead into the current script. Do you think this would be an improvement? Or is there anything else you suggest?
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Hey Mike - okay, so yes, I still think you're circling/limiting what's at the core of this piece of work - which is that it is an actual memory belonging to actual people and actual place - i.e. you! It's as you say - really you've just written some spoken dialogue to sit on-top of the small segment of animation you're planning on creating. Alex is right - you need to rewind things a bit for the viewer and just state things simply.
ReplyDelete"When my brother and I were younger, we would play in the woods... etc. We imagined many things... etc... but the creature we loved - and feared! - the most, was the giant...."
That done, you need to think about what we are looking at while we listen to you: are we looking at photographs of you and your brother as children; are we looking at the woods? What are your visual strategies for bookending this animated sequence? Is it Stranger Things? Is is more 'A Monster Calls' ... what 'is' this experience, Mike? Think about all the films you've watched on the course, all the animations, all the essays you've written on film language, everything you know and everything you've learned... what are your ambitions for this experience?